rabbit growing roots

topic posted Tue, September 18, 2007 - 6:03 PM by 

I want something
real bad
but I don't know
what it is

I'm pacing
and panting
without moving
always late
for a performance
that has never
been scheduled
in a hall
that doesn't exist

The lettuces
and waiters
are long gone
so I listen without moving
and dine on the sound
of cutlery scraping
a fine china plate
whose clay
has not yet
been dug
from the ground

And my
unblinking pink eye
studies the woodgrain
and fine lacquered line
of an instrument
that hasn't
been invented
to play music
that has yet
to be written

I want something
real bad
but I don't know
what it is

Surprised
to find my
paddy-paws
rooted in soil
I think
I shall never flower
I have no
technicolored
perfumed petals
that I care to unfurl
all pointy and licking
at clouds and sky
but my fine new roots
will spread and know
the carroty secrets
deep within
the rocks
of this place
this place
that doesn't exist

Still
aboveground
I do not move
but the incidental
days and nights
race around my stillness

Racing
belowground
I keep pace
with the swirling, twirling
days and nights
getting closer to knowing
whether I belong
to the gardener or
the garden

I want something
real bad
but I don't know
what it is

I don't, I don't
I don't know
what it is
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  • Re: rabbit growing roots - second try

    Wed, September 19, 2007 - 11:16 AM
    I felt the need to rewrite it.
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    rabbit grows roots

    I want something
    real bad
    but I don't know
    what it is

    I am pacing
    without moving
    always late
    for a show
    that's never
    been performed
    in a cavernous hall
    that never was built

    And the
    closest I can get
    to the music
    is to study
    with my round, pink eyes
    the rippled woodgrain
    and fine lacquered lines
    of instruments
    that are waiting
    to be invented
    so they can
    play songs
    that have yet
    to be written

    The lettuces
    and the waiters
    are long gone so
    ever hungry
    I dine
    on the memory
    of the sound
    of cutlery scraping
    fine china plates
    whose clay
    has not yet
    been dug
    from the ground

    Having paused
    too long
    I find I have
    become a vine
    rooted in the soil
    in the garden
    of seasons yet to come

    My fur
    shall never
    turn to flower
    I will have no
    technicolored perfumed
    petals to unfurl
    all pointy and licking
    at clouds and sky
    but my fine new roots
    will spread and know
    the carroty secrets
    deep within
    the rocks
    of this place
    this place
    that isn't here

    Aboveground
    unable and
    unwilling to move
    the incidental
    days and nights
    race around me
    like a rushing
    blinking river
    blink
    blink

    Belowground
    where none can see
    my roots keep pace
    with the swirling
    twirling flow of
    days and nights
    deeper growing
    closer to knowing
    whether the garden and I
    belong to the gardener
    or we both
    belong to the
    garden

    I want something
    real bad
    but I don't know
    what it is

    I don't, I don't
    I don't know
    what it is

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