the space between

topic posted Fri, May 4, 2007 - 4:55 PM by 
There may come a day when
you fall in love with me.
And because you are good, and kind,
and all the wonderful things a person can be
eventually, it will became clear to me
that I am not deserving of your love.
And I’ll have to fight the urge to run
like an animal before a forest fire.

There may come a day
When I will love you anyway
Because although life may have turned me wild
I do remember love, and I still believe.
But it's feral and dangerous, this love of mine.
And infected with all sorts of dark, ugly things.

Because you have always lived
in safety and warmth
You will come to believe
that I have joined you there
nestled by the fire
in the mansion of your love
But there’s no way in (no way in at all)
for someone like me.

From then on out,
I'll spend my life
in that terrifying space
Between your love and mine

And I’ll crawl all over those badlands and back alleys
building shoddy, stupid scaffolds,
and rickety bridges and catwalks,
to get as close as I can…
never close enough to feel the heat from your heart
but at least near enough to glimpse its light

And because I’ll love you
almost as fiercely as I love myself
I’ll build great dams and levees
to keep you safe
from the darkness
inside me.
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  • Re: the space between

    Fri, May 4, 2007 - 5:10 PM
    Now that is a damned good poem drusilla stranger, one which you can take pride in. It read like creamed butter, and took me somewhere meaningful. I call poems like this silver, because they sparkle and the eyes slice right down the page unhindered. Bravo! Keep up the excellent work.
    • Re: the space between

      Fri, May 4, 2007 - 5:18 PM
      Wow. Thanks, Steve.

      Sometimes the silver ones fly right outta you; other times they take work. This one was originally a journal entry; I edited it, and cut it, and sliced it to bits, then I cut a bunch more, till it was bones. Maybe that's why it's an easy read.
  • Re: the space between

    Wed, May 9, 2007 - 12:26 PM
    Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!! For a minute there i thought you was talking directly to me.
    • Re: the space between

      Fri, May 11, 2007 - 10:02 AM
      I like the last lines the best and the first lines the least.
      There's something so direct and almost unpoetic about the opening.
      Like what a good poet would write just after getting out of a long session in couple's therapy.
      • Re: the space between

        Fri, May 11, 2007 - 10:42 PM
        " like the last lines the best and the first lines the least.
        There's something so direct and almost unpoetic about the opening.
        Like what a good poet would write just after getting out of a long session in couple's therapy."

        Heh. Thanks, JM.

        It's not really what I think of as a poem.... just a highly attenuated journal entry. But after I'd pared it down to almost nothing, it seemed to be *something* - it just made everybody so uncomfortable I wanted to share it. I think its medium might be the spoken word - since that's more likely to have a bigger impact and make everyone even more nervous. I think men might feel more uneasy about it than women - but that's just my wild-ass guess.




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