Hello fellow lovers of the prose; I am in search of some good people who want to read a short story near completion and critique it in all and any form. I have posted shorter stories on various tribes but have not received any replies. Does that signify the writing is shit? I do not know; whether or not any one read the story, liked or dis-liked the story, or puked over the writing style remains a complete mystery to me because not one person left a comment on any of my post to offer any insight. I need some feed back. I do not have fellow students to read my crap, and my freinds are professional slackers. The two short stories I have in mind are pretty quick reads, ruffly 15 pages typed, with lots of dialougue. drop me a message at my site. Thanks. madmark
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Re: Critique of a short story
Thu, April 10, 2008 - 4:45 AMWell, I thought that started off nicely, but was put off by the profanity, which did your request no favors, as you called your own writing "crap" and inferred that it might even be "shit," which isn't the best way to attract potential editors. The juxtaposition of "puking" and "feed back" was also a little unsettling, though somehow poetic. "Roughly" and "friends" were misspelled. I would keep at it. There's definitely potential there.
