"ThE WaLkINg TrAdEgy"
aLoNe yEt SuRroUnDed...
sO mAny sMiles, yEt sO mUch hAte. .
sUch a viBrAnt aNd briGht sUn...
yEt sO mUch daRknEss aNd bitteRnesS
A furTure sUrelY tO eNd iN teArs aNd trAGedy,
bUt neVer tHe lEss mY hEaD iS heLd hiGh. . .
aS i prePare mY sElf fOr tHe dAy...
i wIll dAncE wiTh tHe deVil.
aLoNe yEt SuRroUnDed...
sO mAny sMiles, yEt sO mUch hAte. .
sUch a viBrAnt aNd briGht sUn...
yEt sO mUch daRknEss aNd bitteRnesS
A furTure sUrelY tO eNd iN teArs aNd trAGedy,
bUt neVer tHe lEss mY hEaD iS heLd hiGh. . .
aS i prePare mY sElf fOr tHe dAy...
i wIll dAncE wiTh tHe deVil.
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Re: ShOrT pOeMs. . .
Wed, May 16, 2007 - 11:15 PM1) Too much interest in telling as oppose to describing.
2) The poem's dichotomous advancement is distracting.
3) Tragedy is referred to the future, yet from the poem's title the tragedy is the present condition. Was there supposed to be one tragedy or multiple tragedies?
4) Nevertheless is one word, not three.
5) The random capitalization in this poem is superfluous (contributing nothing to the poem).
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Re: ShOrT pOeMs. . .
Thu, May 17, 2007 - 3:05 AMOr just check the caps lock key on your computer. Maybe you got some gum stuck under there or something.
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Re: ShOrT pOeMs. . .
Thu, May 17, 2007 - 10:39 PMreminds me of BOB DYLAN
:) good work
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